Jeff's 180 Credit Media Diploma: Unit 19 Plan & Pitch Audio

Radio Drama 1

"Play Chopsticks for me"

Radio Drama 2
"On Her Majesty's Secret Service"

More Info on Style

"Play Chopsticks for me"

"You have what we call in the musical profession , sloppy buttocks" this is said by The Great Stromberg who speaks in a very upper class, almost German accent this means that Stromberg is a wealthy man and has made a lot of money from doing piano "lessons". This shows that he is wealthy because "buttocks" is quite a high class term. Also the way he is says is with a upper class accent.

"On Her Majesty's Secret Service"

"He's Branched off" this is said by James Bond as Blofeld as he hits a tree while skeleton bob sleighing whilst being pursued by Bond. This is just what Bond does, a quick pun as he defeats a enemy this shows that as character Bond is very cocky and has a very quick wit despite how unimaginative the line is.

My Ideas

Unexpected : A discovery found in a mining facility on Mars has lead to believe that Earth will be destroyed so billions of people are evacuated from Earth to Mars as it is the closest plant with a large enough colony. As turns it out actually it's Mars that the prophecy is talking about but this isn't realise until the event is happening.

Smugglers : A detective is lead to believe that there is a smuggling ring that smuggles alien weapons around the solar system and it is up to him and his partner to shut down this operation.

Group Idea Radio Drama Script Link

https://goo.gl/3FQ9OZ

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Pitch feedback

The pitch was unorganised and rushed. Confidence in the idea was lacking and the pitch itself just wasn't that convincing so as a pitch goes, I won't be handed any money unless I improve my confidence in the idea and know what the hell I was talking about and slow down and take things a little easier and no stalling for time. I really struggled filling the 2 minutes with info about the script, I think if I did my own script most of these issue would be resolved as I know what direction I want to take it, and I would generally be more confident with my own ideas. The whole rushed talking thing will need to be resolved.

Pitch Feedback 2
The piece of feedback that we received the most about is the confusion the 2 titles, we renamed the radio drama from "The Immortal Man" to "The God Complex" and due to the treatment being made on photoshop and screen-shotted onto powerpoint meant it is very difficult to change it and we were running out of time so we just had to go through with it. The talking should've been spread out better so we have have about the same amount of things to say, also less looking back at the board couldn't go amiss.

Feedback on script

The most obvious problem with my script is that it is too short and hasn't got much going on to do with the story so it isn't even obvious who the main character is and what their wants and obstacles are is will easily be solved as I add to the script so there is a lot more story content. The spelling is excellent, the punctuation needs work and the grammar needs fixing, proof reading the script and making the necessary changes will be the course of action here.

Possible music to used with idea

I think that Spectre by Radiohead is a good choice for a main theme as one of the main characters is someone who is believed to be dead but isn't. in fact he is considered immortal, like a spectre.

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My Treatment

Link: https://goo.gl/Mkw7cy